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Subject9876 Cherry Ave, Apt 426 — a few small changes before signing
Hi [landlord name],
Thanks for sending the lease — I'm keen to move forward and just have a few small requests before I sign. None are dealbreakers.
1. §7 (Security Deposit) — Could we return the deposit within 30 days (or my state's limit) with the itemized deductions, rather than up to 60? And pay interest if my state requires it.
2. §5 (Late Fee) — Could the late fee be a single reasonable amount or capped (say 5% of rent), instead of $5 per day with no limit?
3. §12 (Repairs) — Could we add a line that the landlord will keep the home in compliance with housing codes and make timely repairs? Standard, and protects us both.
4. §7–§8 (Cleaning) — Could cleaning and repair charges be limited to documented damage beyond normal wear, with receipts?
Happy to hop on a quick call. I'd love to get this signed this week.
Best,
[Your name]
[Your phone]
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